I am giving more of Alexandria, Josh and Aris since they seemed to be popular last week. This scene happens a couple of weeks before last week's teaser:
Hey there! Go, girl power! Lol. I like the line about the niggling doubts mushrooming into vivid realization--nice. Also, don't forget to use contractions in your dialogue when you go back and revise--makes it sound much more authentic! :)
Glad she stood up to him!!
ReplyDeleteI really like that she didn't just shrink to him acting like that. I have a feeling he's going to fight back though. What an ass.
ReplyDeleteOooh, I love what a strong female character Alexandria is! I'm glad she gave it to Josh, and I can't wait to see if she does it somemore!!!
ReplyDelete"Come, now!"
ReplyDeleteAh, someone should learn the difference between a human being and a dog. Great job!
I find myself punching my fist into the air, screaming- YOU GO GIRL!
ReplyDeleteHehe, great teaser
I loved the way Alexandria handled him. Especially when she stood up--that how things roll.
ReplyDeleteGREAT teaser. Can't wait to see more of Alexandria
Hey there! Go, girl power! Lol. I like the line about the niggling doubts mushrooming into vivid realization--nice. Also, don't forget to use contractions in your dialogue when you go back and revise--makes it sound much more authentic! :)
ReplyDeleteNice job!
*waves pom-poms*
ReplyDeleteWOOHOO! That's how it's done. :D
Great struggle/power scene here. Totally rooting for your MC. Nice!
ReplyDeleteI cannot see that ending well. I once dated a guy as possessive as that, wish I had had the courage to stand up to him like your MC.
ReplyDeleteNicely done--again! I keep wondering what's going on here and what will happen. You're very good at creating tension.
ReplyDeleteOoh, I like how Alexandria isn't letting him boss her around!
ReplyDeleteSorry I was so late getting to this :D