Josh is a cock block (pardon my French)!! I felt the tension in the last paragraph. Can't wait to find out what happens next. :D
ohh I love the deep vibrations! Ugh I mean I like how that sounds in your story!
“Yeah, I do. It feels,” she paused, “powerful.”Okay, that's not a produce of my dirty mind! lol, Great Job!
Oooh. I like. Great dialogue!
Very short, but very descriptive -- you managed to do a lot with only a few lines. Good job!
Darn Josh! I was really feeling the connection between Aris and Alexandria :3 Can't wait to see more!
Brilliantly written, really looking forward to reading more.