Tuesday, March 16, 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Teaser Tuesday, two weeks in a row :) Last week was a flashback but not this week. Lillian is in the hospital.

I stare at the ceiling thinking of Elijah and wonder what he’s telling Detective Sanchez. I haven’t spoken to him since yesterday, when it happened. I remember him finding me and telling me it would be okay, but didn’t realize he called for help.

“Knock knock,” says a female voice, “May I come in?” A beautiful woman with cinnamon colored hair comes in my room.

“I’m Dr. Carmichael. Do you feel like talking, Lillian?” she asks in a husky voice.

“No,” I say. “I don’t mind talking.”

She laughs. It’s a tinkling sound reminding me of a child, such a contrast from the voice. “I’m a psychologist. Your mother wanted me to stop by. Normally in this situation I’d be in anyway but she seems to think you really need to talk to me so I cleared some time.”

I like Dr Carmichael but I don’t really want to talk to her. What is there to say? I’m a horrible person. I killed my baby. I’m guilty. I fucked up. All of these things are true and nothing she can say will change that. I stay silent as she takes a seat and drift off again.

13 comments:

  1. Whoa! What happened with the MC? She killed her baby?! :O

    Great teaser! <3

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  2. She killed her baby?!?!? What? You can't leave me hanging like that! lol...well, I guess you can. Great snip! :)

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  3. OMG where is the rest!!!! Great teaser, though I have way to many questions now LOL

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  4. She killed her baby? Damn. That's deep. That's really deep. I did not expect that.

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  5. 'I killed my baby'? You seriously got me hooked. Very, very intriguing situation.

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  6. Holy crap! So intense! What happened? She what? Alright. Must. Know. More.

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  7. Wow. This is so intense. So hooked!

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  8. Very hooking! What a place to leave people in a tease. Nice work!

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  9. Gosh, Jenn. Your writing just keeps getting better and better. I particularly like the last paragraph. And I vaguely remember you telling me about this, so I think I know what's going on, and it's a really interesting story concept.

    Keep on bein' awesome. :)

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  10. WTH?? Where's the rest of this? How did she fuck up? I. Love. It, Jenn! :D

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  11. Jenn, is this what you IMed me about a little while back? If so, KEEP WRITING. Wow! This was intense. I really really want to know what happened now!

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  12. (PS: if you look at my blog, you'll see that you have won somethiiiing...)

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  13. wow. very raw. like the voice!!

    best of luck with your writing!

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