For my teaser, I am giving my pre-query for LARCH followed by a short teaser - I'm getting too close to the end and into spoiler territory.
In 2015 Nuclear Holocaust came to the world. America eventually fell into a Totalitarian Dictatorship. An active Underground group tries to usurp the beloved Dictator at every turn.
Larch is seventeen-years-old and carries a secret that even she doesn't know - she is the only successfully cloned human in the world. Her uncle, the Dictator, will keep her safe at all costs.
The Underground wants her. The failures of the cloning program live amoungst the Underground with the Scientist who created them - and Larch. Larch holds the key to the future of these clones deep in her DNA.
Stone, one of those sworn to protect her, is working for the Underground and his father - the Scientist. What began as a simple mission to help the Underground changes as Stone comes to realize the complications of Larch - she is as human as he.
Larch
I looked at Rodriguez, softly snoring and a feeling of devotion rose up in me. He was probably the only person as I was growing up who could be counted on, a surrogate father, and the only one who didn’t betray me, that is if he didn’t know I was cloned. If he did then he would have to enter the column of betrayers.
He opened his eyes and looked at me. “Morning, Larch. How are you?” he asked with concern.
“Better but I have to ask you something important.” I was scared he would not live up to my image of him.
“Okay, should I be nervous?” he asked.
“Did you know that I am not human?” I blurted.
He sat up so fast he lost his balance and had to catch himself with his arms before he fell out of the bed. “What the hell are you talking about? Of course you’re human!” he practically roared.
I love the premise of your novel, especially how you describe the Dictator as "beloved". That's cool. Interesting teaser. I loved your first paragraph.
ReplyDeleteAaaah, I love this, the whole concept, not just the teaser. Keep going! I want to see what happens.
ReplyDeleteI love the premise of your story and it was a great teaser. I'm happy that Larch appears to have someone she can trust.
ReplyDeleteI love this.
ReplyDeleteDid you know I'm not human?
That's just awesome.
I'd definitely keep reading this to see what's happening!
So glad I'm reading this right now. :) I <33 Rodriguez. Poor thing. I want to hug him.
ReplyDeleteShe's not human?! I thought you said she was! Is this a spoiler?
ReplyDeleteMe loves!
"Did you know I'm not human?" = such a great question. Can't wait to read what comes next (and what comes before!).
ReplyDeleteOOOOO!
ReplyDeleteWhat a teaser!
Isn't she human? I want to know more...
Wow, just wow. Short, but very effective. And what a cruel cliffhanger. :D
ReplyDeleteLove this Jen! The whole premise is great and I love the dialog! Hooked me :)
ReplyDeleteI love the query (and I need to work on mine)! And the tension in the scene was beautifully done :)
ReplyDeleteReally awesome query letter! I'm glad to read the full presmise after reading so many great snips in FNW. I like the chemistry/relationshionship between Larch and Rodriguez. Nice.
ReplyDeleteSounds like an intriguing novel, and you have me wondering, is she really human or does she just not think she is because she's a clone?
ReplyDeleteNice tease!
First of all, I really like the name Larch, lol.
ReplyDeleteSecondly, awesome tease. Clone versus human? I want to read more :]
Great cliffhanger!! I want to know where this conversation goes...
ReplyDeleteThe premise is amazing and I love the dialogue! Great teaser!
ReplyDeleteI am so incredibly interested in this WIP! I think the concept is just amazing. And great tease :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful premise and teaser, Jenn! Can't wait to read it!
ReplyDeleteI like the teaser, well done!
ReplyDeleteOo, that last line is really exciting and powerful.
ReplyDeleteI want to read more! Excellent teaser!
ReplyDeleteYour first paragraph was great! I love this WIP! So glad I get to read it! :D
ReplyDeleteI really love this concept. A human clone with a secret in her DNA that can save others? Sweet
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